Winning poem for School Years 12-13

04-Dec-2018


Autumn Poetry Competition 2018

Winning Poem for School Years 12-13

Carmen Anderson for 'All Make of Shoes'.

First the dapper desert boots,
Tan suede, grainy like sand dunes.
They must have made a comeback
Since I was a boy,
I wish I could too.


Here some sturdy black boots stomp,
Steel toes coated with cement dust,
Pounding on the pavement. 
I shrivel as they march past


Here come the tip-tapping ones, 
Gleaming out their office pride, 
Thin heels and toes razor-sharp.
I shudder and turn aside.


Nike, Adidas, Puma,
Converse, Vans, brightly yellow DMs,
I see them all; those shining brogues
With purpose, destination – 
While i have nowhere else to go.


Brightly coloured rubber boots, 
Wellies of every size and hue
Crunch in grimy winter slush
Or slush or splash in reckless rush
While I shiver in my sodden rags.


A battered hat to gather coins,
A tatty coat and cardboard mat,
A mould-stained sleeping bag,
A scarf to hold my coughing back, 
And two odd shoes with matching holes,
No thoughts, no words, no me, no home.

Judge Conchita Triay's Comments:

This poem first immerses us in the world of shoes, parading before our eyes a wide range of styles and colours. There is great attention to descriptive detail throughout, allowing us to visualize what the narrator- a homeless man- sees. Shoes and boots “tip-tap” and “stomp” along the pavement, and each passing pair reinforces the fact that he has “nowhere to go” while they walk “With purpose, destination-“. The marching feet only serve to emphasise the narrator’s aimlessness. He is only an observer, literally on the fringes of society.

This poem does not adhere to a strict rhyming scheme but rather varies it from stanza to stanza, sometimes with a rhyming couplet, sometimes with an alternating rhyme scheme, allowing a freer form of verse which enhances the sense of movement that the poem is trying to capture. Each verse focuses on the feet walking past but also on creating a sense of the narrator’s isolation. The line which describes the narrator’s own footwear “ And two odd shoes with matching holes”, is a poignant image which encapsulates the man’s miserable existence.  With its sensitive control of language and structure Carmen Anderson has produced a poem which makes an impactful social comment on the very ugly reality of homelessness.