Winning Poems for School Years 6-7

04-Dec-2018


Autumn Poetry Competition 2018

Winning Poems for School Years 6-7

Winner: Alana Sacarello for 'Fruit!'.

Mummy says fruit is good for me
I’d have it any time of the day
I love it not because I should
I’d eat it come what may.


U love the green ones, red ones,
Squishy, squashy orange ones
Sharp ones, sweet ones
Crunchy peely, stony ones 
Small ones, large ones
Pippy, hairy, long ones
Soft ones, hard ones
And luscious, juicy, ripe ones.


So if you think of trying fruit,
No matter its shape or size,
Just give it one enormous bite,
For a delicious, scrummy surprise!

Judge Jackie Anderson's comments:
The joys of eating fruit is shared with enthusiasm by the poet in a celebration of all the wonderful varieties that can be sampled. There is good use of rhyming sounds and a lovely structure with an introductory verse, then a central section where the repetition, the list of types of fruit and the rhythm pick up the poem's pace and thrust it towards an aptly fulfilling conclusion. There are some lovely descriptions listed here, with an accelerating rhythm and the repetition of the word "one" which makes this a delightful poem to recite out loud: "sharp ones, sweet ones, crunchy peely, stony ones, small ones, large ones, pippy hairy, long ones.." A worthy winner and a fun poem for all to savour.

Runner Up: Isabelle Ramos for 'Shifting Seasons'

As the days get longer, evenings brighten
The scent of a new beginning fills the air
Daffodils are blooming as children hunt for chocolate eggs
Wet grass under your feet as spring showers pass overhead
Over meadows looking lush

As i walk along the shore
On a warm and sunny day
Waves are rippling as is smiling
Toes curling in the sand
Skin tanning under the scorching summer sun

Pumpkins and witches stalk this season
As Halloween comes about
Warm colours abound
And trees become bare as leaves fall to the ground
Candy corn is eaten and people will say “trick or treat!”

Days grow shorter, nights are longer
Wind and rain seem here to stay
Curtains drawn and fires blazing
Children staying awake to catch a glimpse of the magical flying reindeer
As Christmas lights guide the way

Until

As the days get longer, evenings brighten...

Judge Jackie Anderson's comments:
This is a rather lovely poem abut the cycle of the seasons, thoughtfully structured to echo the flow of the year. The poet takes the reader on a journey through spring, summer, autumn and winter and with the repetition of the first line right at the end, brings us back round to the springtime again. In the course of the four main stanzas, the poem weaves together a selection of images that effectively engage the senses: "the scent of a new beginning", for example. Familiar images are given a fresh slant and the reader is treated to contemplation of the year through the poet's young eyes. An enjoyable, slightly nostalgic read and a good achievement for a young poet.